Thursday, January 12, 2012

No Use Crying [flash fiction]

The challenge: Set shuffle on your MP3 player, use the title of the first song played

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No Use Crying
[Buddy Guy & Junior Wells]
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He turned around and faced the wall. The spray can in his hand seemed to have a life of its own, transforming the time worn concrete into a work of art. Spray after spray, layer upon layer, colors bloomed and abstract shapes started to take form.

He never knew what would appear, he just knew when. His brain would get foggy, it would be hard to focus and he felt like someone was watching him. He could take it for a while but he always gave in, getting the spray can, searching out a blank canvas, shaking it and letting the paint fly.

This time seemed different, the urge was the strongest ever but the timing was off. He never painted at sunset, always sunrise, letting the warmth wash over him as he worked. But today he started at sunset. That was the first mistake.

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44 comments:

  1. So, if we keep writing we might write all of the words out? Now THAT is scary!

    Excellent!

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  2. Excellent descriptive writing. One more descriptive sentence tying in with "All the color was painted out of him" would have been good. But I loved it!

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  3. Enjoyed reading your post! Nice twist ending! (I also loved your rant about word verify... I turned mine off in my blogs a few months ago for the same reasons!)

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  4. I love the idea of flash fiction - and I loved "all the color was painted out of him" - holy cow, have I felt that way sometimes myself - wonderful.
    PS: I love your blog design it's fantastic!

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  5. Ah, creepy! I didn't see that coming either!

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  6. WOW. An interesting perspective. Is it possible to empty our brain-bottles?

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  7. Fantastic!!! Can't wait to read more of your work. Thanks for this post!!

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  8. Thanks, Paul. Glad you enjoyed it...

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  9. Wow. I love when I get an unexpected ending.

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  10. Intriguing. You captured my attention. It's well done as I don't know if its horror, fantasy, psychotic breakdown, or even time travel. I don't know the song so i don't know if that would help me. I like it.

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  11. Loved it! Sure glad the first song wasn't "Take this job and shove it". (Or as my French wife always says, "Take this job and shovel it.")

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  12. Thanks, Miranda. This was a fun one...just sort of flew out of my fingers which was a new experience for me.

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  13. Thanks you, Stephanie. Glad you enjoyed it...

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  14. Oh this is a chilling story. Wonderful imagery.

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  15. Thanks, Lisa. Twists at the end seems to be my developing style. LOL!

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  16. Hi Ado, glad you enjoyed the post. I have fallen in love with flash fiction...now if I could just make money with it. ;-)

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  17. It wrote itself...that's creepy. LOL!

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  18. Thank you, Julia. Glad you stopped by!

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  19. Very nicely done. Glad you made it to Yeah Write!

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  20. "the color was painted out of him" is breathtaking.

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  21. Thanks, Ben...I enjoyed reading all the blogs. Won't have time every week but plan to jump in a couple of times a month.

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  22. What a compelling and intriguing story! I found myself rushing to read it to find out what happened, and then you blew me away with that ending. Nicely done!

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  23. Ohhh, I didn't see that coming at the end. Pardon the pun. This was really gripping!

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  24. "He didn't understand. Where were the colors?" I love that!

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  25. Wow. Totally compelling.

    This is great, I love flash fiction, as FF is the only thing I have ever had published.

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  26. I really enjoyed reading this, although the ending was traumatic. This is my first visit to your blog. I will be back.

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  27. Thank you, Katie. Glad you stopped by.

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  28. Glad you enjoyed it...kind of wrote itself. LOL!

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  29. Thanks for stopping by and commenting, glad it "got" you!

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  30. Wow - thank you! I loved your blog and have added it to my reader list.

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  31. Thanks, hope you enjoy browsing around. Lots of other stories since I've spent the month of April doing the A to Z Challenge.

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