Thursday, May 31, 2012

Orange [five sentence fiction]

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
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Well hidden by the bushes, he blended in perfectly while he searched for sustenance; survival of the fittest, no matter the means.

At a sound most would miss, he swiveled his head, searching intently. Finally he located it, dinner; a bit on the small side but it would do.

He took off quickly, nothing but a blurry shape would be seen by any who might be watching.

His prey, caught by surprise, seemed mesmerized by the brilliant orange of his eyes, never noticing the lethal beak and claws as it was snatched up and carried away.

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15 comments:

  1. I really admire those who are good at flash fiction. I'm not so much. I'm not known for brevity. But this sounds like fun and I should work on this; I'll give it a try. The word is orange? Five sentences. Another couple of cups of coffee and I should be able to come up with something...

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  2. A lump formed in his throat as he watched the frame building burn; orange, red and vermillion illuminating the night. Wood crackled and hissed, glass shattered as pieces fell inward, collapsing. The fire consumed the house, and the memories; all those memories. Was it wrong? No, she deserved it: burn witch, burn.
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    Please don't ask where that came from... I have NO idea.

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  3. Doug, that was great. Go post it on your own blog and then link that up over at Five-Sentence Fiction.

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  4. Donna, I loved this. Great sense of action and use of the prompt. And I happen to really love owls. :)

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  5. Doug, I agree with Jayne, that was great. Definitely put it on your blog, add yourself to the Linky List (click the Five Sentence Fiction image) and join in the weekly fun!

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  6. I saved off a bunch of photos but those eyes just grabbed me and pulled me in. I wrote this really late last night, just glad to pull something off so quickly. LOL! Still have to start reading the others. Thanks!

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  7. Wow! Those brilliant eyes... who can ignore them? I was also mesmerised by those eyes!
    The pic and flash fiction - a great combo!

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  8. I felt as if I were the owl, with those mesmerizing eyes, sharp skills, and pressing hunger!

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  9. Aloha Doug: This is also my first try with Lillie McFerrin's Five Sentence Fiction. Who said you're not good at flash fiction? I've read oddles of your sh. stories and they are always wonderful. Here's mine...as you probably know by heart by now: www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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  10. Hi Donna: Neat little story. I also love owls and have an eclectic collection of crystal ones. Btw, love your blogspot format...which template are you using? I'm getting bored with mine. Thanks for visiting my orange story.

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  11. I have to agree! I think you do quite well with flash fiction :) Nice job, Doug!!

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  12. Owls are one of my favorite animals!! Awesome take on the prompt. :)

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  13. Excellent take on the prompt and such a lovely photo too.

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  14. Thanks for all the comments, everyone. I really appreciate it!!

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