tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post8873631708817005007..comments2023-04-14T05:46:16.714-04:00Comments on DB McNicol, Author: Awkward [five sentence fiction]Donna B. McNicolhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15209611782116113024noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-42020044208301991212012-09-18T17:17:18.000-04:002012-09-18T17:17:18.000-04:00Oh, Donna, that last line is a real kicker. Beauti...Oh, Donna, that last line is a real kicker. Beautiful job edging up the emotional tension with each sentence and then eviscerating us! <br><br>Nice to see you "flashing" again!Kern Windwraithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16771591425163484238noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-21619839089563377482012-09-18T18:23:56.000-04:002012-09-18T18:23:56.000-04:00Oh, that last sentence is so vividly gut-wrenching...Oh, that last sentence is so vividly gut-wrenching. So, wonderful to read your writing again :)Lillie McFerrinhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05367116687588265202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-45359672414906030402012-09-18T21:47:33.000-04:002012-09-18T21:47:33.000-04:00Having taken part in the last couple of FSF has ma...Having taken part in the last couple of FSF has made me realise just how hard it is to create a picture in so few words (Im very much a rambler). You did it beautifully particularly with that last line.Sarahhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04402703967636964187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-70336830170241934822012-09-19T02:23:16.000-04:002012-09-19T02:23:16.000-04:00Darn you! Now I've got tears in my eyes and a...Darn you! Now I've got tears in my eyes and a full heart. Very moving.Texas Yellow Rosehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18416672836387064595noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-70084391023264868622012-09-19T02:26:34.000-04:002012-09-19T02:26:34.000-04:00Very moving and so evocative, I could see her walk...Very moving and so evocative, I could see her walking so carefully up those steps... Please continue to participate in FSF :-)Honoréhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09708384630512279323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-88082423279325526052012-09-19T03:45:04.000-04:002012-09-19T03:45:04.000-04:00That last sentence pulled everything together - ve...That last sentence pulled everything together - very nice.aswinglerhttp://aswingler.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-36198579955491578152012-09-19T11:09:56.000-04:002012-09-19T11:09:56.000-04:00Thank you everyone for all your wonderful comments...Thank you everyone for all your wonderful comments. I started out in a different direction but the story took me here.Donna B. McNicolhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15209611782116113024noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-51487211145669434902012-09-19T11:59:52.000-04:002012-09-19T11:59:52.000-04:00Just beautiful!Just beautiful!Lisa Shambrookhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12767127776898278402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-80569463625214907182012-09-20T05:21:18.000-04:002012-09-20T05:21:18.000-04:00Excellent! Short and poignant.Excellent! Short and poignant.lizy-expat-writerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16289501717229347872noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-30171973346805739272012-09-21T18:07:41.000-04:002012-09-21T18:07:41.000-04:00It has been far too long since we saw your name be...It has been far too long since we saw your name beside a new piece of flash fiction writing. <br><br>This is lovely, Donna. The way it's written, a reader really does feel like they are accompanying her up the stairs. Heartfelt ending. I've missed your writing!Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)http://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6963015679650968932.post-6626221293995357162012-09-26T15:30:15.000-04:002012-09-26T15:30:15.000-04:00There is not a button for gut wrenching; cool just...There is not a button for gut wrenching; cool just does not fit this. That was outstanding!! Thanks mom!! You rock!!~blessedhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00854663337277536403noreply@blogger.com