Thursday, June 13, 2013

HOME [five sentence fiction]

HOME [five sentence fiction]

Memories assailed her senses as she surveyed what had once been her home, a home for generations of her family. Words and pictures flooded her mind: love, family, laughter, tears, sanctuary, nana and poppa, mom and dad, babies, siblings, water fights, pillow fights, board games, and the never-ending bumps, bruises and broken bones of an active childhood.

She started to walk away, knowing she would never return, when something on the ground glittered as the sunlight peeked through the clouds. She squatted and started digging out the object, quickly recognizing it as her mama's locket.

Tears fell to her hands as she pulled it out of the mud, her heart filling with warmth as she realized the house wasn't what was important; the floods may have taken the building but her family was what made a house a home.

9 comments:

  1. Good job and so true.
    Scott
    Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/06/12/fsf-five-sentence-fiction-61413-home-pg/

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  2. Lovely writing and what is important is what we grab when we know we may never return...if we even have the chance to grab something.

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  3. That's so warm and comforting. Beautiful writing..

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  4. This was great, very emotional.

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  5. I love this very touching and meaningful piece. Great.

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  6. I really love this story. It sent tingles down my spine. I'm very happy that she found her mama's locket. The descriptive words brought a short movie to my mind.

    Barbara @ allmylivesnow.com

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  7. Donna, I agree with all the lovely comments already left here. Your heart comes through in everything you write. :))

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  8. I loved all the memories at the beginning and how she realises they are what is most important in the end. Great piece of writing.

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