This story is in response to the photo prompt at Rochelle's Friday Fictioneers.
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| PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot |
So self important.
Scurrying around like rats in a maze.
No eye contact.
Not really living.
I could take them out one at a time.
Hundreds before they could stop me.
But I won't. Really, I won't.
I've thought about it.
But why?
No satisfaction.
No joy.
I'll just take out one.
The real reason I'm here.
I'll take out ME.
65 words
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I'm sad today. The news is full of suicides. People we know, people we don't know, people who have internal demons we can't understand. Please, if you are feeling like there is no other way out, call the suicide hotline in your country.
Such a sad state to have reached, the feeling that no one cares and nothing matters. Well written.
ReplyDeleteThere seems to be a rash of suicides lately, not just celebrities but family of friends. Anthony Bourdain's seemed to put me in the mood for what I wrote. Thanks for reading.
DeleteI wasn't expecting that! Sad story - but well written.
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I didn't expect it either. There seems to be a rash of suicides lately, not just celebrities but family of friends. Anthony Bourdain's seemed to put me in the mood for what I wrote.
DeleteAt least no one else gets hurt...
ReplyDeleteTrue...that was where I was initially heading but just couldn't do it. There seems to be a rash of suicides lately, not just celebrities but family of friends. Anthony Bourdain's seemed to put me in the mood for what I wrote.
DeleteA sad story beautifully written.
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Thank you, Keith. I was in that kind of mood yesterday...so very sad. There seems to be a rash of suicides lately, not just celebrities but family of friends. Anthony Bourdain's seemed to top it for me.
DeleteSelf sacrifice? Hmm... nice one!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Courtney. Took me back a bit as the words spit out...
DeleteSo much to read between the lines. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThank you, I appreciate the visit, read and comment!
DeleteDear Donna,
ReplyDeleteI've often thought that these nut cases that take out crowds of innocent people before turning the gun on themselves would do better to skip the crowd. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
As soon as I saw the photo, I started writing. This one wrote itself. Thank you.
Deletewell, that went from slightly horrifying to terribly sad!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Laura. There seems to be a rash of suicides lately, not just celebrities but family of friends. Anthony Bourdain's seemed to put me in the mood for what I wrote.
DeleteSo very sad, both the desperation to end one's life, and the numbness that leads to fantasies of mass murder. Well written.
ReplyDeleteThank you, I appreciate the kind words.
DeleteI've always wondered about people who commit mass murder then kill themselves. Not that I condone suicide, but why take so many with you? Thanks for a thought provoking story. Alicia
ReplyDeleteLike you, I've often wondered. I've never understood the mass killings but have had experience with suicide in my family and in several friends as well. So sad...
DeleteI have never been in that dark place, but some of my clients have, and it's cold and lonely there. You've portrayed it well.
ReplyDeleteFortunately, I haven't either but I've had family in that space. Not pretty...thank you.
DeleteI was close for a period. I'm so glad I didn't, because now I'm happy, and also because I now understand that suicide doesn't end the pain - it just shifts it onto other people.
ReplyDeleteWonderful news that you are in a better place. I lost my mother to suicide and yes, it does leave behind a lot of pain. I have three friends without sons because of it. So very, very sad. Hugs!!!
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