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She smile and ruffled his hair before unlocking the front door. This was to be their dream home. But then again, the last one was supposed to be, and the three before that. They'd had to move and hide over and over, but this time, this time it would work. She was sure of it.
"Come in and check out your bed-" She stopped short.
"Hi, Glenda. I see you brought my boy home to me." He had found them again.
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ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it, thanks for dropping by!
DeleteTime for a new dream house. Some shadows never leave.
ReplyDeleteSo true...if they can only get away...
Deletei like her positive outlook. hopefully, she'd strike gold someday.
ReplyDeleteHe found them even before they got through the front door this time. Quite chilling!
ReplyDeleteThanks, the story just sort of wrote itself.
DeleteGreat psychodrama. The detail of the child counting steps was marvellous
ReplyDeleteSome noticed the jacket, some the downstairs, for me it was the step that jumped out at me so they became the feature. Thanks for taking time to read & comment, Neil.
DeleteTruly chilling.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sandra. Too many women & children dealing with this.
DeleteIt seems her ex is always one step ahead of them. What psycho. Well written, Donna.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Russell. I appreciate the stop by!
DeleteThere seems to be no escaping him. Nice chiller.
ReplyDeleteHe does seem to always be one step ahead...you have to wonder how (or who).
DeleteWow, that's scary! Hope they manage to get away for good one of these times.
ReplyDeleteJanet’s Smiles
Thanks, Janet. I hope so, too!
DeleteAwww .... I was so happy for the boy.
ReplyDeleteSadly, this is happening more than we think.
Super captivating ending.
Isadora 😎
I had no intention of ending that way, but you know what happens - the story writes itself sometimes. It's so sad but true that too many are dealing with situations like this. Thanks for stopping by to read & comment, it's much appreciated.
DeleteThat's a rough situation. What can one do? Name change? Cut off from everyone she knows?
ReplyDeleteI suspect she had already been doing that, but he had ways....sad.
DeleteDear Donna,
ReplyDeleteThat was a sinister ending. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you, Rochelle. The ending surprised me, too!
DeleteReally good job of capturing the shock and the sadness all at the same time.
ReplyDeleteMuch appreciated, Sandra.
DeleteI love the way your story started, how it ended, and everything in between. Good writing!
ReplyDeleteThank you...100 words can be tough!
DeleteJust when she thought it was over, that happened. Seems there's no hiding place for them. Great take Donna.
ReplyDeleteMy go at Friday Fictioneers!
Thanks, Keith!
DeleteExcellent handling of a difficult topic.
ReplyDeleteAbuse victim, I guess, never being allowed to escape.
Thank you, appreciate the visit.
DeleteChilling, to be stalked by such a man.
ReplyDeleteYes it is....gave me a chill as I wrote it.
DeleteNice contrast between the innocence of the child and the reality of the situation. I think someone's telling tales - she might need to find out who it is if she's going to escape.
ReplyDeleteYou are absolutely right!
DeleteOy. How does he find them before they've even moved in? She needs to get some professional help in covering her tracks. Or find out who the snitch is.
ReplyDeleteYes she does...I think she thought she had done enough but obviously she hadn't.
DeleteWhat a shame. All that running for nothing. A good, well-written story, Donna. ---- Suzanne
ReplyDeleteThank you, Suzanne. Let's hope they get another chance!
DeleteDammit!
ReplyDeleteI was so hoping this was it...
So was I...then that last sentence wrote itself. Sigh...
DeleteThat was a quite a chilling twist at the end. Maybe all those plants could do with some blood and bone fertilizer.....
ReplyDeleteOoooh, I like that idea! LOL! Thanks for taking time to visit and comment.
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