Monday, January 9, 2012

Hunger [five sentence fiction]

She walked along the sidewalk, sneaking glances at the people around her. They were oblivious to anyone but themselves; totally wrapped up in their world to the exclusion of everyone and everything else around them. A tear rolled down her cheek and she wiped it away with her sleeve. Why couldn't anyone see her? Why didn't anyone want her?

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7 comments:

  1. Poor girl! Awesome job with hunger :)

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  2. Oh Donna, the desire for companionship can be a very sharp hunger indeed. Poignant.

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  3. There was so much emotion in only five sentences. I had to read it again. Great job!

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  4. Thanks for your comments, nice to know someone is reading. ;-)

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  5. Excellent - I feel for the girl and really want to know what she will do next. Well done!

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  6. I love the way you used hunger as a non-food word. So beautifully written!

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  7. Nice way to use the prompt. I could feel her emptiness inside. Lovely job.

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