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No Use Crying
[Buddy Guy & Junior Wells]
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He turned around and faced the wall. The spray can in his hand seemed to have a life of its own, transforming the time worn concrete into a work of art. Spray after spray, layer upon layer, colors bloomed and abstract shapes started to take form.
He never knew what would appear, he just knew when. His brain would get foggy, it would be hard to focus and he felt like someone was watching him. He could take it for a while but he always gave in, getting the spray can, searching out a blank canvas, shaking it and letting the paint fly.
This time seemed different, the urge was the strongest ever but the timing was off. He never painted at sunset, always sunrise, letting the warmth wash over him as he worked. But today he started at sunset. That was the first mistake.
Ooh, chilling!
ReplyDeleteSo, if we keep writing we might write all of the words out? Now THAT is scary!
ReplyDeleteExcellent!
Excellent descriptive writing. One more descriptive sentence tying in with "All the color was painted out of him" would have been good. But I loved it!
ReplyDeleteDidn't see that coming!!!
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed reading your post! Nice twist ending! (I also loved your rant about word verify... I turned mine off in my blogs a few months ago for the same reasons!)
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of flash fiction - and I loved "all the color was painted out of him" - holy cow, have I felt that way sometimes myself - wonderful.
ReplyDeletePS: I love your blog design it's fantastic!
Ah, creepy! I didn't see that coming either!
ReplyDeleteWOW. An interesting perspective. Is it possible to empty our brain-bottles?
ReplyDeleteWhat a fantastic twist at the end!
ReplyDeleteFantastic!!! Can't wait to read more of your work. Thanks for this post!!
ReplyDeleteCripes. What a great tale!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Paul. Glad you enjoyed it...
ReplyDeleteWow. I love when I get an unexpected ending.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing. You captured my attention. It's well done as I don't know if its horror, fantasy, psychotic breakdown, or even time travel. I don't know the song so i don't know if that would help me. I like it.
ReplyDeleteLoved it! Sure glad the first song wasn't "Take this job and shove it". (Or as my French wife always says, "Take this job and shovel it.")
ReplyDeleteThanks, Miranda. This was a fun one...just sort of flew out of my fingers which was a new experience for me.
ReplyDeleteThanks you, Stephanie. Glad you enjoyed it...
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ReplyDeleteOh this is a chilling story. Wonderful imagery.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Lisa. Twists at the end seems to be my developing style. LOL!
ReplyDeleteHi Ado, glad you enjoyed the post. I have fallen in love with flash fiction...now if I could just make money with it. ;-)
ReplyDeleteIt wrote itself...that's creepy. LOL!
ReplyDeleteMakes you wonder, doesn't it!
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it, Alison.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Abby. Glad you enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Julia. Glad you stopped by!
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done. Glad you made it to Yeah Write!
ReplyDelete"the color was painted out of him" is breathtaking.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ben...I enjoyed reading all the blogs. Won't have time every week but plan to jump in a couple of times a month.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, Jamie.
ReplyDeleteWhat a compelling and intriguing story! I found myself rushing to read it to find out what happened, and then you blew me away with that ending. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful writing and nice curveball. Erin
ReplyDeleteThat's a very interesting piece!
ReplyDeleteOhhh, I didn't see that coming at the end. Pardon the pun. This was really gripping!
ReplyDelete"He didn't understand. Where were the colors?" I love that!
ReplyDeleteWow. Totally compelling.
ReplyDeleteThis is great, I love flash fiction, as FF is the only thing I have ever had published.
I really enjoyed reading this, although the ending was traumatic. This is my first visit to your blog. I will be back.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Katie. Glad you stopped by.
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it...kind of wrote itself. LOL!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Michelle.
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by and commenting, glad it "got" you!
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it!
ReplyDeleteWow - thank you! I loved your blog and have added it to my reader list.
ReplyDeleteThanks, hope you enjoy browsing around. Lots of other stories since I've spent the month of April doing the A to Z Challenge.
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