Friday, September 28, 2012

Devotion [five sentence fiction]

Lillie McFerrin has given us a Five Sentence Fiction prompt that is generating a wide variety of flash fiction. I hope you enjoy mine.


He scanned his memory, seeking a glimpse of a time when he wasn't The Guardian, a time when he wasn't watching over his city and protecting the inhabitants, but he failed to find it.

He sighed inwardly, change had been his one constant throughout the years but now the change unnerved him.

This was different and he could sense the evil in every molecule of his body as he watched the orange clouds fill the sky.

He was old and tired, his body stiff with age and fatigue, but he was still The Guardian and he taken a vow to forever watch over his city.

A tear slid down his cheek as the final change began with the slowing of his heartbeat as his body became one with the stone ledge beneath him.

Hope you'll give Five Sentence Fiction a try, too.


  1. Beautifully written, I felt quite sad for him. Good piece.

  2. oh, no, he gave hope.....well-written, but upsetting! (smile)

  3. Very nice, Donna. I'm a little frightened to imagine what change is presaged by orange clouds.

  4. I don't know how you do it! But you do! Brilliant!

  5. This is great! Very well written!
    McGuffy's Reader

  6. Such a selfless act of devotion! Beautifully written, one could not help but feel the sadness of this final scene.

  7. An original take, and nicely done.


  8. Lovely - was it inspired by the photo or did you have to search for a picture to fit the story?

  9. That was a very evocative piece. A sort of end-time story. I found it compelling. Thanks for sharing it!

  10. Oh, I like this one! Very intriguing.


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