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Sunday, May 20, 2012

Lightning Flashed [flash fiction]

Lightning flashed, lighting the night sky for a brief moment. The searchers froze, wary of being seen. Wind rushed through the forest, rustling the leaves and masking their sounds. Led by their seer and The Chosen One, they continued forward, a silent choreography weaving through the forest.

The Mountain of the Sacred Cave rose up out of the mist now surrounding them. Soon they would recover the amulet stolen by The Evil Ones, regaining their honor and reclaiming their lands. Too long their clan had lived like mice, hiding in burrows, venturing out only for food.

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"A Flash of Fantasy"
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This is an entry in Cherie Reich's 2nd Annual Flash Fiction Blog Hop, May 21-23. This year the theme is "Lightning flashed...".

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27 comments:

  1. Summer RossMay 21, 2012 at 5:57 AM

    Great entry! I love how different everyone's stories are! Thanks for posting.

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  2. Cherie ReichMay 21, 2012 at 6:12 AM

    Thank you for entering my 2nd Annual Flash Fiction Blogfest! The six finalists will be announced on Friday, May 25th. I will further comment on your entry on Thursday.

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  3. Chris FriesMay 21, 2012 at 7:20 AM

    Very imaginative! I like how you wove a whole quest saga into a tight 300 words -- very nice.

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  4. Amy L. SonnichsenMay 21, 2012 at 7:34 AM

    Yes, this is an amazing amount of action for 300 words! Nice writing and very interesting story. Good luck! :)

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  5. LauraMay 21, 2012 at 7:43 AM

    Fantastic post, such a great story in such a tiny amount of words. Thanks for sharing with us :)

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  6. Donna B. McNicolMay 21, 2012 at 1:38 PM

    Thanks everyone, glad you enjoyed it. I am loving checking out the wide variety of great stories. And we still have two more days...wow!!

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  7. DonnaMay 21, 2012 at 3:40 PM

    Nicely done. Well, I'm trying the Flash Fiction Blogfest, Donna. I'm feeling brave. Gave it a go and threw it out there for the world to tromp on!

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  8. Heather MurphyMay 21, 2012 at 3:42 PM

    Very unique!

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  9. Andrea TeaganMay 21, 2012 at 4:28 PM

    This was great. It made me feel like I was watching a movie :)

    I loved the ending.

    Andrea

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  10. Von L CidMay 22, 2012 at 3:05 AM

    So much happens in 300 words. This could easily be expanded to saga levels. Great job. Thanks for the story.

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  11. Danielle B.May 22, 2012 at 3:55 AM

    This flowed so wonderfully. I can't believe you told so much in so few words.

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  12. M Pepper LanglinaisMay 22, 2012 at 5:29 AM

    This is really great on its own, and yet also feels like it could be the beginning of something much larger.

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  13. Crystal CollierMay 22, 2012 at 8:38 AM

    I'm going to agree with M Pepper up there. I hope you're planning on fleshing this out to a full short story or more. =)

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  14. Mary MaddoxMay 22, 2012 at 12:17 PM

    Yes, it's a well structured piece with resolution, but I would love to know more about the world you've created.

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  15. Donna B. McNicolMay 22, 2012 at 4:20 PM

    Again, thank you all for you kind comments. Now I'll have to consider the idea of doing something more with this at some future date. ;-)

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  16. farawayeyesMay 22, 2012 at 7:10 PM

    Interesting and very descriptive. Very nice all around.

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  17. NephylimMay 23, 2012 at 6:13 AM

    Interesting. A whole epic told in 300 words. I liked it

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  18. Michael PierceMay 23, 2012 at 5:24 PM

    Very nice flow and description, with a powerful ending. Great entry!

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  19. Misha GerickeMay 23, 2012 at 5:40 PM

    Nice twist. ^_^

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  20. Julie DeGuiaMay 23, 2012 at 8:17 PM

    You have packed so much into your 300 words. Love that it has a clear conclusion!

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  21. Donna B. McNicolMay 24, 2012 at 3:53 AM

    Once again, thanks everyone for visiting and taking time to read my tale! Off to read more Lightning Flashed stories.....

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  22. Cherie ReichMay 24, 2012 at 6:23 AM

    Wow! This sounds like a great introduction to a novel or something like that. I would love to see more. Great job!

    I'll announce the finalists tomorrow.

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  23. Tara TylerMay 24, 2012 at 7:46 AM

    excellent scene! i'd love to know more!

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  24. Mina LoboMay 24, 2012 at 2:19 PM

    I was going to say what Cherie said; that this self-contained tale could be the prelude to a sweeping sage. I'd love to read more about a female Chosen One! :-)

    Some Dark Romantic

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  25. Donna B. McNicolMay 25, 2012 at 4:55 AM

    Thanks everyone for reading and commenting. I'll be saving this for a prologue for a future novel/novelette.

    I hope you all have visited Cherie's page and checked out her six finalists. Some amazing writing...I had a hard time choosing just one!

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  26. Adam GaylordJuly 4, 2012 at 6:02 AM

    Great story! Mine got a little out of control and ended up a bit longer than 300 words. Check it out:

    http://onfictionwriting.com/lastmonthwinner/Lightning-Flashed/99/

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  27. Donna B. McNicolJuly 5, 2012 at 2:01 AM

    I enjoyed it, definitely a Star Trek feel to it. Thanks for posting the link, Adam.

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