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Saturday, May 12, 2012

Sombrero [five sentence fiction]


Tables lined the tree-shaded streets, each piled with stacks of well worn clothes, rusty tools, ancient household appliances, partial dinnerware sets and knick-knacks that no one wanted - all in all, your typical neighborhood yard sale.

"Mommy, mommy, look at me," my four year old son clamored from somewhere close by.

I looked around and although I could hear him, I couldn't see him, "Deke, where the heck are you, get your butt over here right now!"

"I'm right here, mommy," he giggled as he stood, the picture of innocence; three feet of mischievousness adorned by cast-off cowboy boots that came up over his knees and a rainbow colored sombrero that covered his eye.

Jumping up and down with excitement he shouted, "Buy me, mommy, I'm a cowboy!"



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23 comments:

  1. Lisa ShambrookMay 12, 2012 at 12:10 AM

    Aw cute! Loved it when my kids were small and wore things so big they drowned them!

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  2. michelleMay 12, 2012 at 1:41 AM

    This paints a picture that is... priceless! I can picture him jumping up and down...

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  3. Donna B. McNicolMay 12, 2012 at 3:09 AM

    I know...now it's my grandkids that do it. LOL!

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  4. Donna B. McNicolMay 12, 2012 at 3:09 AM

    It got me giggling as I wrote it. Thanks for stopping by and commenting.

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  5. Sandra CrookMay 12, 2012 at 3:41 AM

    Really vivid, I could have been there. Nice one.

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  6. injaynesworldMay 12, 2012 at 6:05 AM

    That was adorable!

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  7. BullishMay 12, 2012 at 6:08 AM

    This is wonderful! I can picture it so clearly! The face I see under the brim is that of my five year old grandson!

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  8. AdminMay 12, 2012 at 7:00 AM

    I can see him now ... nice imagery here.

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  9. Jo-Anne (jtvancouver)May 12, 2012 at 7:52 AM

    Very sweet and I too thought you described the garage sale very well!

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  10. Donna B. McNicolMay 12, 2012 at 9:45 AM

    Thanks, Sandra. It was a quick but fun write.

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  11. Donna B. McNicolMay 12, 2012 at 9:46 AM

    Thanks, Jayne. I pictured my 5 y/o grandson when I wrote this.

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  12. Donna B. McNicolMay 12, 2012 at 9:56 AM

    That is who I was picturing when I wrote it...umm, my 5 y/o grandson, not yours. LOL!

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  13. Donna B. McNicolMay 12, 2012 at 9:56 AM

    Thanks, Robert. Glad you've joined the five sentence fiction crowd!

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  14. Donna B. McNicolMay 12, 2012 at 9:57 AM

    Thanks Jo-Anne, your continued support amazes me! I greatly appreciate it.

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  15. BlakeMay 12, 2012 at 11:18 AM

    I feel like a parrot saying this, but the description was wonderfully vivid. My mind did a flashback to all the yard-sales I've been to, trying to contain the little siblings...

    Very well done. Very much so.

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  16. Donna B. McNicolMay 12, 2012 at 11:58 AM

    I'm glad you enjoyed it, Blake. One of my lighter ones. ;-)

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  17. StephanieMay 12, 2012 at 6:58 PM

    What an adorable story! Loved the descriptions. I could picture every detail in my mind, especially the child. :) Wonderful job!

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  18. Donna B. McNicolMay 13, 2012 at 4:20 AM

    Thanks, Stephanie, glad you enjoyed it!

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  19. McKenzieMay 13, 2012 at 4:23 PM

    Absolutely precious. :) made me smile.

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  20. Beth ZimmermanMay 13, 2012 at 7:40 PM

    Adorable! I'd buy him!

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  21. Donna B. McNicolMay 14, 2012 at 7:47 AM

    Thanks Beth & McKenzie!

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  22. lizzie loodlesMay 18, 2012 at 7:54 AM

    This is just so cute! Who could resisit??? xxx

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  23. Donna B. McNicolMay 18, 2012 at 1:07 PM

    Thanks, Lizzie, and welcome to my blog!

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