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| PHOTO PROMPT submitted by Courtney Wright. Photographer prefers to remain anonymous |
He ruffled the boy's head as the four year old asked, "I help, Pappa?"
He sat on the timeworn concrete wall beside the house, unzipped a boot and extended his foot.
"I got it." The boy tugged till it let loose. He held it up. "See?"
"Very good. Next!" He held out his other foot.
"Wiggle it, Pappa!" This time he fell, boot in hand. He stood and brushed the seat of his pants. "I gots it, too, Pappa. Eat now?"
He straightened, no longer tired. "Sure."
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Dear Donna,
ReplyDeleteHow invigorating is the love of a child at the end of a long day. Sweet portrayal of father and son.
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you, Rochelle. I hope I can contribute more stories. The ones by the other authors have been amazing!
DeleteThe wiggling always does it
ReplyDeleteYes, it does. LOL!
DeleteWonderful, touching story.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Linda.
DeleteThe love of a child conveyed so well. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThrough the eyes of a four year old...if we all could remember to do that once in a while.
DeleteYou were right. Our stories are almost the same. Except of course your child seems way much cuter than mine😅
ReplyDeleteLOL - they were both adorable. ;)
DeletePoor little kid must be really, really hungry.
ReplyDeleteAren't all four year olds? LOL!
DeleteAw, good lad :-) That's put a bit of spring in dad's step!
ReplyDeleteThe little ones remind us of what's important...
DeleteSuch a nice, simple story of father and son. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Iain.
DeleteThat was such a sweet story - very vividly written. I liked it a lot.
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Thank you, Susan. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
DeleteI do love this story... father and son sounds like they need each other.
ReplyDeleteThank you, appreciate the drop by and read!
DeleteA moment in time between father and son. A lovely picture.
ReplyDeleteThank you, glad you enjoyed it.
DeleteLovely! You made m heart smile with this genuine moment
ReplyDeleteThank you...glad the emotion got through to you.
DeleteWhat a lovely scene. The kid is so proud of his achievement. Beautiful writing, and I see you're a Scrivener fan, too. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Gah. I use Scrivener for all my mystery novels - lifesaver!
DeleteWhat an awesome gesture by papa.
ReplyDeleteAw, thank you, Marty!
DeleteA beautiful scene, the child so willing to help and the father taking his lead from his son.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sarah. I appreciate you stopping in to read and comment.
DeleteThats the sweetest scene - the small and tender moments you take away from bringing up kids, the little things that mean so much. Lovely writing
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lynn. I could picture the scene, makes it easy to write!
DeleteSweet 'Slice of life's scene. Being someone's hero makes up for all the weariness.
ReplyDeleteYes it does! Thanks for stopping by!!
DeleteThat was absolutely wonderful, Donna. Way to join FF!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Dale. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I've put FF on my reminder list, hopefully I can do more of them.
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