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Saturday, May 19, 2018

#FridayFictioneers: A Long Day

PHOTO PROMPT submitted by Courtney Wright. Photographer prefers to remain anonymous
His bent back and slow walk betrayed his fatigue, but he still found a smile for his son.

He ruffled the boy's head as the four year old asked, "I help, Pappa?"

He sat on the timeworn concrete wall beside the house, unzipped a boot and extended his foot.

"I got it." The boy tugged till it let loose. He held it up. "See?"

"Very good. Next!" He held out his other foot.

"Wiggle it, Pappa!" This time he fell, boot in hand. He stood and brushed the seat of his pants. "I gots it, too, Pappa. Eat now?"

He straightened, no longer tired. "Sure."

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38 comments:

  1. Dear Donna,

    How invigorating is the love of a child at the end of a long day. Sweet portrayal of father and son.
    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you, Rochelle. I hope I can contribute more stories. The ones by the other authors have been amazing!

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  2. The wiggling always does it

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  3. Wonderful, touching story.

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  4. The love of a child conveyed so well. Nicely done.

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    1. Through the eyes of a four year old...if we all could remember to do that once in a while.

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  5. You were right. Our stories are almost the same. Except of course your child seems way much cuter than mine😅

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  6. Poor little kid must be really, really hungry.

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  7. Aw, good lad :-) That's put a bit of spring in dad's step!

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    1. The little ones remind us of what's important...

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  8. Such a nice, simple story of father and son. Well done.

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  9. That was such a sweet story - very vividly written. I liked it a lot.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  10. I do love this story... father and son sounds like they need each other.

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  11. A moment in time between father and son. A lovely picture.

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  12. Lovely! You made m heart smile with this genuine moment

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    1. Thank you...glad the emotion got through to you.

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  13. What a lovely scene. The kid is so proud of his achievement. Beautiful writing, and I see you're a Scrivener fan, too. :)

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    1. Thanks, Gah. I use Scrivener for all my mystery novels - lifesaver!

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  14. What an awesome gesture by papa.

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  15. A beautiful scene, the child so willing to help and the father taking his lead from his son.

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    1. Thanks, Sarah. I appreciate you stopping in to read and comment.

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  16. Thats the sweetest scene - the small and tender moments you take away from bringing up kids, the little things that mean so much. Lovely writing

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    1. Thank you, Lynn. I could picture the scene, makes it easy to write!

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  17. Sweet 'Slice of life's scene. Being someone's hero makes up for all the weariness.

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  18. That was absolutely wonderful, Donna. Way to join FF!

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    1. Thank you, Dale. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I've put FF on my reminder list, hopefully I can do more of them.

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