No, they were too expensive, she knew that and she knew that as much as her parents loved her, the shoes she wanted - the shoes she needed, would not be in the box. Determined to look happy regardless of what the box contained, she pasted a sappy smile on her face, took a deep breath, opened the box lid and moved the white tissue paper aside.
She gasped in surprise, the silly smile wiped out with an expression of sheer joy, a pair of brand new Scarlet Red Nike Air Max 90 shoes; the impossible was now possible, her parents had proven that and she believed it with her heart.
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Loved the build up, I'm so glad she got the shoes she wanted in the end :)
ReplyDeleteSo sweet, with that bittersweet edge of trying not to get your hopes up for something that means so much. :)
ReplyDeleteEveryone has these moments where you have to stuff down hope--so for her to get exactly what she wanted: such a great feeling to read. I loved this. Made me think of one of my students.
ReplyDeleteGlad everyone enjoyed it...it was a fun write.
ReplyDeleteVery nice. You captured the anxiety & the anticipation of the moment well and show us enough of the character to know that she deserves the joy she receives in the end.
ReplyDeleteVery creative take on the prompt, and I always love a happy ending.
ReplyDeleteVery sweet...so wonderful when something like that happens... gives her all the confidence she needs :)
ReplyDeleteAw... I love this one. That her parents so believed in her giving her that extra belief in herself was really lovely. I, too, have a pair of scarlet Nikes! I will think of this story when I wear them.
ReplyDeleteLoved, loved, loved this! We all know the desire of wanting somenthing so badly but so out of reach and the sheer surrprise of receiving it is just gorgeous. I'm so pleased she got the shoes and I bet she now wins that race!! Excellent. xxx
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping in and commenting everyone!! I appreciate it...
ReplyDeleteWhat a thoroughly likeable child; great piece and topical too.
ReplyDeleteI love how she steels herself for disappointment, how she puts her family first in spite of how desperately she wants those shoes. And a happy ending! Even more awesome!
ReplyDeleteThe impossible was now possible! Hope and faith are wonderous things. I can picture her face changing from the set smile to joy. Lovely Donna, really lovely :))
ReplyDeleteWaving hello @Sandra, Kern & Jo-Anne, glad you stopped in and enjoyed the tale.
ReplyDeleteAnd now, I too want these fantastic shoes!
ReplyDeleteI had that same feeling, Britton. LOL!
ReplyDeleteThis child has a wonderful temperament!
ReplyDeleteAnd this is a wonderful and feel-good tale! Dreams do come true... *sighs*
Glad I'm not the only one who saves the wrapping paper :) Great story!!!
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